Proof reading
One of the hardest things to do when we write, is to proof read our work after. When we proof read, we need to look for any little mistakes we have made and try to fix them, before we can say that our work is finished.
Read the passage below and see if you can re-write it without the six mistakes that have been made:
The children scipped excitedlie across the playground? The teacher appeared at the gate with a box ov toys. He place it on the floor and took out the skipping ropez.
Can you explain what the mistakes were?
Can you extend it and make it even better by adding more to the sentences?
Dear Miss Carruthers,
Here are my answers.
The children skipped excitedly across the playground. The teacher appeared at the gate with a box of toys full of toys. He placed it on the floor and took out the toys.
Well done for correcting the mistakes girls. Can you make it a bit more exciting?! My writing was quite boring and I know you’ll be able to add some details and events that make it more interesting to read!
The children skipped excitedly across the playground. The teacher appeared at the gate with a box of toys. He placed it on the floor and took out the skipping ropes.
1. skipped : because the c was not the correct one.
2. excitedly : it ended with ie but it had to end with y.
3. ?: it was wrong because it was not a question.
4. of : it was wrong because it ended with a v.
5. placed : because it can’t be place.
6. ropes : it couldn’t ropez because it doesn’t end with a z.
The happy children skipped excitedly across the bright playground. The nice teacher appeared at the black and grey gate with a box of toys. He placed it on the muddy floor and took out the colourful skipping ropes.
Dear Miss Carruthers
Here are our corrections… also we made the story more interesting with adjectives!
Hope you like it!
The noisy children skipped excitedly across the empty playground. Suddenly the old and grumpy teacher appeared at the gate with a box of exciting toys. He placed it on the dirty floor and took out the broken skipping rope.
The children skipped excitedly across the crowded playground. The teacher appeared at the gate with a huge box full of toys! He placed it on the bumpy floor and took out all the short, broken skipping ropes.
The mistakes are:
Ropes is spelt wrong.
Skipped is spelt wrong.
There should be no question mark on the sentence ‘The teacher appeared at the gate with
a box of toys’.
Of is spelt wrong.
Place should have been placed.
The children skipped excitedly across the playground. The teacher appeared at the gate with a box of toys. He placed it on the floor and took out the skipping ropes.
Mistakes:
1. skipped: it was spelt incorrectly.
2. excitedly: it was spelt incorrectly.
3. It should not have been a question mark because it was not a question. It should be a full stop.
4. of: it was spelt incorrectly.
5. Placed: It happened in the past so it should be in the past tense not the present.
6. ropes. spelt incorrectly.
The children skipped excitedly and noisily across the playground. They were having great fun when the strict teacher appeared at the gate with a box of toys. He placed it on the floor and took out the blue, pink, orange and purple skipping ropes even though the children wanted green skipping ropes. Then the fun teacher came along and got them green skipping ropes and the children were delighted and cheered and the fun teacher became Head-Mistress.
The whole school was happy.
The loving children skipped excitedly across the grassy playground.
Scipped: The ‘c’ should be a ‘k’
Excitedlie: It should be ‘ly’ not ‘lie’
‘?’: It should be a ‘.’, not a ‘?’.
The smiley teacher appeared at the gate with a box of fun toys.
ov: Ov is spelled with an ‘f’ at the end, not a ‘v’.
He placed it on the green floor and took out the skipping ropes.
‘place’: ‘Place’ doesn’t have a ‘d’ on the end so it didn’t make sense.
Ropez: It should be an ‘s’ not a ‘z’.
Dear Miss Carruthers,
My answer is:-
The children skipped excitedly across the playground. The teacher appeared at the gate with a box of toys. He placed it on the floor and took out the skipping ropes.
The mistakes were:- 1. sentence: skipped, excitedly,a full stop.
2. sentence: of
3. sentence: placed,ropes
During lunchtime break the children skipped excitedly across the big
playground. Their class teacher appeared at the gate with a big box of toys. He placed it gently on the floor and took out the rainbow coloured skipping ropes.
Greetings,
Sophia
Here is the corrected passage:
The children skipped excitedly across the playground. The teacher appeared at the gate with a box of toys. He placed it on the floor and took out the skipping ropes.
Spelling corrections: skipped, excitedly, of, ropes.
Punctuation mistake: the first sentence needs a full stop.
Incorrect tense: placed, not place, for past tense.
Wow Year 2 I’m impressed.
The little children skipped excitedly across the playground. The kind teacher appeared at the gate with a box of outdoor toys. He placed it on the floor and took out brightly coloured skipping ropes.
The children skipped excitedly across the playground. The teacher appeared at the gate with a box of toys. He placed it on the floor and took out the skipping ropes.
Spelling mistakes: Skipped, excitedly, of and ropes
Place needed to be placed
Full stop not a question mark on the first sentence.
Dear Miss Carruthers,
The little children skipped excitedly across the big playground.The kind teacher appeared at the golden gate with a brown box of cuddly
toys ?.He placed it on the green floor and took out the colourful skipping ropes.
The children skipped excitedly across the playground. The teacher appeared at the gate with a box of toys. He placed it on the floor and took out the skipping ropes. The children took the skipping ropes and thanked the teacher.
Mistakes
1. Skipped is spelt incorrectly.
2. Excitedly is spelt incorrectly.
3. The question mark after playground should not be there.
4. Of is spelt incorrectly.
5. Place should be spelt as placed.
6. Ropes is spelt incorrectly.
ropez should be rope.
Ov should be of .
Scipped should be skipped.
excitedlie should be excitedly
? should be .
place should be placed
The new children skipped excitedly across the calm playground. The clever teacher appeared at the gate with a box of squishy toys. He placed it on the floor and took out the rainbow skipping ropes.
The children skipped excitedly across the playground. The teacher who supported QPR, appeared at the gate with a gigantic box of toys. She placed it on the floor and took out the long skipping rope. Next, they made two teams, the Tottenham team and the Arsenal team. They played tug of war. Suddenly the strong Tottenham Team pulled the rope quickly and knocked the Arsenal team to the floor…. Hooray. Tottenham won! ⚽️⚽️⚽️⚽️⚽️⚽️⚽️⚽️⚽️??????????????????????????????
The children skipped excitedly across the humongous playground. The teacher appeared at the gate happily with a vibrant box of toys. He placed it on the wide floor and took out the colorful skipping ropes.
Scipped- skipped
Excitedlie- excitedly
?- no question mark
Ov- of
Place- placed
Ropez- ropes
Hi Miss,
The children skipped excitedly across the playground. The teacher appeared at the gate with a box of toys. He placed it on the floor and took out the skipping ropes.
Bye, Bo
The children skipped excitedly across the playground. The teacher appeared at the gate with a box of toys. He placed it on the floor and took out the skipping ropes.
Can you explain what the mistakes were?
There are no question marks because there are no questions.
Placed not place.
Excitedly, skipped, ropes and of were spelt wrong.
Can you extend it and make it even better by adding more to the sentences?
The children skipped excitedly across the busy playground. The tall, strong teacher appeared at the gate with a big box of toys. He placed it on the floor and took out the skipping ropes gently. All the kids rushed to get the skipping ropes. Some kids got bored of skipping so they took a football out.
The flamboyant children happily skipped excitedly across the playground. The teacher appeared at the gate with a huge box of toys. He placed it on the hard concrete floor and took out the long skipping ropes.
The children scipped excitedlie across the playgroundThe teacher appeared at the gate with a box ov toys. He place it on the floor and took out the skipping ropez.
The children skipped excitedly across the play ground. The teacher appeared at the gate with a box of toys. He placed it on the floor and took out the skipping ropes.
1. skipped is the wrong because it doesn’t have
this k.
2. excitedly is wrong because it doesn’t have ie at the end.
3.At the end of playground should be a full stop so it makes sens.
4.ropes should have a s instead of a z.