Good morning Year 6!
Well done for your hard work yesterday.
Today, we are going to have a grammar focus. As a starter, please complete the work below in your Home Learning Book.
On Thursday, we are going to be writing a letter from the Queen to the public asking them to find the thief.
Do you think that this letter will be informal or formal?
- You will need to include:
- Description of the thief
- Details regarding the stolen jewels
- Details regarding the generous reward
The way we talk and write involves formal and informal English. We don’t treat everyone the same way. You wouldn’t talk to a baby in the same way you talk to your best friend. And you wouldn’t talk to your best friend in the same way you talk to your teacher.
We use formal language in situations that are serious or that involve people we don’t know well. Informal language is more commonly used in situations that are more relaxed and involve people we know well.
Task
Look at the letter below. Please re write it on the blog below so that it is in formal English.
Hello,
I am writing to let you know that a pizza I was unlucky enough to order at your restaurant was rubbish.
The cheese was gross, the tomatoes gone off and the base chewy as rubber.
Never will I eat at your joint again. Not only was the food pants, but the waiting staff were snooty, and I had to wait two hours for my grub!
I want a refund, to be paid now.
Cheers,
Mr P. Izza
Extension: You should all complete the extension! Click here to access it and complete the work in your Home Learning Book. Tuesday-extension
Miss Gorick and Mrs Healy xx
Hi Miss Gorick! Here is the letter:
To whom it may concern,
I am writing to complain about your pizza, which I found wasn’t up to standards.
The cheese was revolting, the tomatoes expired and the base awfully rubbery.
I shall never eat at your restaurant again. Not only was the food at a very low standard, but the waiting staff were vey impolite, and I had to wait 2 hours for my food.
This restaurant sounds awfully gross! This really doesn’t tempt me!
Yes I agree that it doesn’t sound the most appealing restaurant although it still makes me fancy pizza for lunch…!
I have also sent in the extension using file sharing 😛
Thank you Charles! I have just received your work-great job!
Here is my changed letter:
To whom it may concern,
I am writing to let you know that a pizza I order at your restaurant was not very good.
The cheese was not very nice, the tomatoes old and the base had barely been cooked.
Never will I eat at your work again. Not only was the food disgusting, but the waiting staff were rude, and I had to wait two hours for my food!
I wish a refund, to be paid now.
Thank you,
Mr P. Izza
Does anyone have any tips for me?
I think its great!
Well done Jeanne! You have definitely made the letter more formal.
Just a couple of tips:
In your second paragraph, just check the tense of the verb ‘order’. Should it be past or present?
Also in your final sentence, just check for missing words.
Other than that, I think it is great and you have structured your sentences well to create a formal tone.
Good Morning Mrs Healy!
This is my improved letter:
Greetings,
I am writing to let you know that the pizza I was unfortunate enough to order at your resteraunt was debris.
The cheese was flagrant, the tomatoes expired and the base was tougher than rubber.
Never will I eat at your resteraunt again. Not only the food was grotesque, but the waiting staff were arrogant, and I had to wait two hours for my serving!
I request a refund, to be paid now.
Yours Sincerely,
Mr P. Izza
Hi Jada, thank you for your response. Just check the use of the word debris. 🙂
Good morning!
Here is my writing:
To whom it may concern,
I am writing to you to let you know that your restaurant was dreadful.
When I ate my pizza, i noticed that the cheese was revolting, the tomatoes had slipped off and the base of the pizza was as chewy as rubber.
I will not eat at this restaurant again and I will not rexcomend it. Not only was the food horrendous, but the waiting staff were arrogant and i had to wait 2 hours for the food.
I would like a refund
, Thank you
Mr P.Izza.
Hi Eliza, thank you for your response. Just read through and check for any spelling mistakes 🙂
Dear Pizza Place,
I am writing to inform you that I came to your restaurant last week and it took me an unusually long time to order and receive my pizza. That was not the only problem; the pizza was awfully unpleasant.
I was looking forward to a fresh Italian pizza as it had said on the front door of your restaurant but instead I received a pizza which had mouldy tomatoes and tasteless cheese served on an under cooked base.
I am extremely disappointed with the quality of your pizza and with the service received by your staff; When asked asked for a knife and fork I was informed there were only knives available. I also noticed, the staff were very slow and I had to wait nearly two and a half hours for my order.
I would like to have a refund happen very soon please and I will not be coming to this appalling restaurant ever again.
Yours faithfully
Mr P. Izza
Hi Elly you have structured your letter carefully however just check your second paragraph as I think the sentence may be a little long 🙂
Ok
To whom it may concern,
I am writing to let you know that the pizza I ordered at your restaurant was not such a delight.
The cheese was horrible and the tomatoes were very soggy and the base was very hard to bite through.
Never will I eat at your restaurant again. Not only was the food revolting, but the waiter were rude, and I had to wait two hours for my food.
I request for a refund, and to be paid now.
Sincerely,
Mr P. Izza
Hi Ethan thank you for your response you have carefully changed the letter to make it more formal. well done 🙂
To whom it may concern,
I am writing to complain about the pizza i was served earlier this morning at your restaurant,which wasn’t up to standards.
The cheese was repulsive,the tomatoes were expired and the base was eminently rubbery.
I shall never eat at your pizzeria again.Not only the food was horrible but the staff were horrendous at there job,i unpleasantly had to wait two hours for my meal!
I would like a refund,thank you.
Yours sincerely,
Mr P. Izza.
Gosh Jade that sounds an awful pizza! Make sure that I is a capital letter 🙂
To whom it may concern,
I am writing to complain about the pizza that I ordered at your restaurant.
The cheese was indigestible, the tomatoes had probably expired a few months ago and the base tasted like rubber.
I’m afraid I won’t eat at your restaurant again. Not only the quality of the food was unacceptable, but the waiting staff were impolite, and I had to wait two hours for my food!
I would like a refund to be paid soon.
yours sincerely
Mr P. Izza
Thank you for your answer Gabriel. In your last paragraph just check for missing words 🙂
Hi everyone!here is my letter:
To whom it may concern,
I am writing to let you know that a pizza i was most unfortunate to order at your restaurant was disgraceful!
The cheese was disgustingly decaying,and the base was as if it had been previously mixed in with a eraser!
Never will i eat at your restaurant again!
Not only was the food poisonous,but the waiting staff had an unbelievable attitude,and i had to wait over two hours for my nourishment!
I require a refund immediately!
Bad regards,
Miss Ariella the 8th
Hi Ariella thank you for your reply. Make sure that I is a capital letter 🙂
Here is my extension. Elly
Marylebone road
TASK 1 London
Dear Mr Sexton,
I am writing to complain about the condition of the playground. Over the last two weeks, I have noticed a great deal of litter. I reckon that this litter is a health hazard. For example, yesterday a year 4 boy fell over and cut his hand on a broken bottle. The boy in question needed four stitches. Furthermore, the litter is an eyesore. Our school has beautiful views of the river and these spoiled by the litter. I believe that there are a number of things that you could do to rectify this problem. Firstly, you could purchase additional litterbins. This would help prevent people discarding their litter recklessly. In addition, I think that our school more adequate security to prevent vandals littering. In conclusion, I hope you will take my concerns seriously and I look forward to your reply back to me.
Yours Faithfully,
Elly
TASK 2
Dear James,
How are you? I’ve been dead busy. We have to work really hard at school to get ready for our SATs. Despite this, I did manage to play a game of football last night with my friends. We won! It was boss! Also, my dad got me a new mobile phone. It’s an 8210! Anyway, gotta go! Speak to you soon. Please write back.
Love from,
Elly
TASK 3
Meanings.
1) Victorious – You have either won something or you are very happy.
2) Cease – To bring something to an end
3) Respond- Say something in reply
4) Swiftly- Without delay or within a short period of time
5) Acquaintances- A person one knows slightly, but who is not a close friend.
Brilliant effort Elly, well done for doing the extension!
Thank you
Here is my letter,
To whom it may concern,
I am writing to complain about the pizza I ordered from your restaurant.
The cheese was not very tasty and the tomatoes was under-cooked.
I will never eat food from your restaurant again. The pizza was very disappointing and what’s even more disappointing is the fact of how rude the staff were. I also had to wait two hours for that pizza that was not very cooked.
I want a full refund as soon as possible.
Mr.P.Izza
Thank you for yourLetter. You have increased the formality of the language but just check whether it should be ‘was or were’.
To whom it may concern,
I am writing to you as I had an unfortunate experience whilst ordering pizza at your restaurant which I found unpleasant.
Firstly, the cheese was appalling, the tomatoes were spoilt and the base was tough.
I am strongly considering never again dining at you restaurant, not only was the food horrid – the staff were arrogant. I had to wait two hours for my meal.
I demand a refund and to have it immediately.
Thank you,
Mr P. Izza
Well done Antonia you have clearly increased the formality of this letter through language choices and punctuation 🙂
To whom it may concern,
I am writing to complain about the recent experience I had at your pizza restaurant. I was extremely disappointed by the quality of the pizza I ordered. The cheese was nauseating, the tomatoes were putrid and the base was inedible.
Consequently, I shall not visit your establishment again following my dissatisfaction. Not only was the food unpalatable, the service was appallingly slow and the waiter was arrogant.
In conclusion, I hope that you give this matter serious considerations and I request to receive a refund promptly.
Yours sincerely,
Mr. P. Izza
Hi Anahi 🙂 Thank you for having a go at the task! You have clearly increased the formality through your use of language. Well done 🙂
To whom it may concern,
I am writing to let you know that your restaurants pizza did not meet my satisfactions and I am quite dissatisfied.
The cheese was revolting, the tomatoes had expired and the base was extremely tough and rubbery.
I am sorry to say but I will never be visiting your restaurant again. Not only was the food substandard, but the waiting staff were discourteous , and I had to wait two hours for my meal!
I would like to request a refund.
Regards,
Mr P. Izza
Well done Haleema! I can see where you have made changes to increase the level of formality 🙂 Great use of ‘dissatisfied’!
Here is my new and improved piece of work:
To whom it may concern,
I am writing to let you know that a pizza I ordered at your restaurant did not meet my pleasure. The cheese had a revolting taste, the tomatoes were old and the base had barely been cooked.
I will never eat your work again. Not only was the food disgusting, but the waiting staff were rude, and I had to wait two hours for my food!
I wish to have a refund please.
Thank you,
Mr P. Izza
Well done Jeanne 🙂 I am impressed to see that you have improved your original version, well done!
Hi Paloma 🙂 Thank you for sending in your homework-I am so impressed to see that you completed the challenge as well. Well done! Do you think you can think of a stronger adjective than ‘not nice’ when describing the pizza?
P.s I miss you (and all of Year 6!) too!
To whom it may concern,
I am writing to you to complain about the unacceptable quality of a pizza I have recently ordered at your restaurant.
The cheese was greasy,the tomatoes mouldy, and the base was raw and rubbery.
I will never come to your restaurant again. Not only was the food inedible,but the staff were insolent and I had to wait hours for my meal. You will receive no recommendations from me, and a very low rating.
I demand a refund,and you should know that I expect it soon!
Yours sincerely,
Mr P.Izza
Hi Laetitia ? You have successfully increase the formality of this letter through your choice of language. Well done!
To whom it may concern
I am writing to complain that a pizza I was unfortunate enough to order at your restaurant and was applauded at the standards. The cheese was nauseating, , the tomatoes had expired and the base was uncooked.
Never will I eat at your ”pizzeria” again. Not only was the food disgusting, but the waiting staff were rude and ill mannered, and I had to wait two hours for my ”food”!
A refund would be much obliged.
Sincerely,
Mr P. Izza
Hi Timothy, it’s great to hear from you and I’m so pleased that you completed the work . You have definitely increased the formality in this letter however check for mistakes in your punctuation! 🙂
To whom it may concern,
I am writing to let you know that the pizza I unfortunately ordered at your restaurant was not as I expected.
The cheese was awful, the tomatoes had expired and the base was rock solid.
Never will I eat at your restaurant again. Not only was the food was unpleasant, but the waiter was impolite, and I had to wait two hours for my meal.
I would like a refund, and to be paid now.
Yours faithfully,
Mr P. Izza
Hi Sergio, it is great to hear from you. You have structured your letter well and increase the formality 🙂