English Task
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This week we have continued reading Mr Majeika and completed some grammar, spelling and handwriting exercises. During the grammar task, you worked on using inverted commas, commas and coordinating conjunctions. Today you will have the opportunity to apply these to your writing.
Today’s English focus is:
Writing
Today is an opportunity to write and share your first paragraph of writing. Write your first paragraph in your yellow book and then type this up on the blog. I will post feedback on the blog about your writing to help you improve.
After feedback, you can continue your writing in your yellow books. Once you have finished, read over and edit your work.
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Tomorrow, a new blog will be posted for you to share your finished pieces. You may like to write this in your best handwriting with all of the corrections.
You can send a photo tomorrow of your finished writing pieces and I will add them to the gallery in tomorrow’s writing blog.
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Task
Skill: To write a story.
You may like to read over Chapter 1 again here to remind yourself of the events that happened before you start writing.
Top Tips for Writing
Support
You might like to plan your writing first by jotting down some ideas before you start writing your story. Click here for a story plan.
Checklist
- Paragraphs (follow the structure in the top tips!)
- Punctuation & Spelling – keep reading over your work regularly.
- Detail – the more detail and description you use, the more interesting your story will be! Look at the story ingredients above.
Example
Click HERE for my example of story writing
Now it’s your turn!
Remember to look at the top tips and checklist to make sure you include important features in your writing. I look forward to reading your first paragraph today and all of your writing tomorrow.
It was Monday morning it was pouring with rain, and it was everyone’s first day back after Christmas.
The head teacher Mr Longbottom, had steam coming out of his ears! The new teacher hadn’t shown up yet and it was nearly 10 o’clock. Mr Longbottom was in the corner, by the window having what looked like, a conversation to himself. The class was getting restless, Carl had just tripped over a chair, he bumped into Tom, who then got really mad and shouted at the top of his voice, which scared Rita, and she started to cry. Mr Longbottom called the class to order. Disaster! He was going to be our teacher for the day.
A great start Ethan! Great use of commas in your writing. As you continue, try to include some direct speech, using inverted commas 🙂
Chapter 1 – The Magician’s Arrival
It was Monday morning. It was pouring with rain, and it was everyone’s first day back after Christmas..
The whole class was angry, literally everyone. Even the normally calm ones. Venella Horsewig was slapping Jack Yellow and Brian Pluto was flicking Vanella and so on throughout the whole class. Even Mr Straw, our the Head Teacher, was annoyed. Mr Straw did his ‘sigh’lent signal and muttered, ‘It’s almost 10 O’clock. Why on Mars is he not ‘ere?!’ I began to hear a sound. Maria Cup, my learning partner, said, ‘What’s that disturbing noise?’.
The sound grew and then a blinding purple light filled the room. I’m pretty sure that it did actually blind some people temporarily. But not me!! Our teacher’s desk turned onto a portal, like a black hole but purple. A man stepped out of this purple portal and said ‘Hi guys! GONE’. Mr Straw looked confused and turned green. ‘Sorry I meant Mr GONE’, said the stranger from the strange place….
Great start Julian, your sentence ‘Why on mars is he not ere?!’ made me laugh! As you continue, make sure you include some description about Mr Gone.
It was Monday morning, first day back at school after long Christmas break. It was very gloomy outside. Low clouds became wet mist that turned into drizzle. A day like this made everyone groggy and sleepy. Patrick was swinging in his chair (he already mastered the technique!). Penelope was reading one of her favourite books. “I’m bored,” whined Matthias, when he was trying to stretch to boost energy. “Me too” replied Julian and laid his face down on his table.
Great start Alex, I love your descriptive sentence- ‘low clouds became wet mist that turned into drizzle.’ As you continue, remember to read over your writing regularly to check for mistakes.
It was Monday morning and it was pouring with rain, and it was everyone’s first day back at school after Christmas.
I was staring out of the window when all of a sudden I saw someone on a small wooden rowboat, it was rowing in the air, going 93 miles per hour. It crashed into the wall of the school with a loud BANG!
A tiny man the size of a mug, did 3 back flips and landed in the classroom.
“Good Morning, it’s very wet don’t you think?
Im very sorry I am late. I was being rude to my rowboat and it flung me off!
I’m your new teacher, Mr Rudder.” he said.
Great start Sebastian! What a fun entrance Mr Rudder makes! I like your idea of the flying rowboat!
As you continue your writing, think about describing Mr Rudder, and share what the children might think and say to each other. 🙂
A good start Clemence, you have introduced lots of characters well. Great use of inverted commas too. As you continue writing, can you add suspense to your story? Build up to the new teacher arriving.
Good effort Louis, your handwriting is super neat! Think through carefully what you want to say in your story, it may help to plan out some ideas on the planning sheet. Remember to keep reading back over your writing to make sure it makes sense. 🙂
CHAPTER 1 MICHAEL
It was a Monday morning , it was pouring with rain, and it was everyone’s first day at school after Christmas . Even though it was raining everyone was happy and all of them were talking except Michael who was reading a book and he knew a lot of things. He knew the periodic table by heart when he was one year old! He knew everything about quantum physics when he was three . Although he was quite weird, Micheal was a happy boy and was generous.
Well done Matthias, thanks for sending a photo of your work too. I can see you have edited it carefully, well done. Michael sounds intriguing! In your next part of the story, remember to set the scene, build up suspense by using lots of description.
It was a Monday morning, it was pouring with the rain, and it was everyone’s first day back to school after Christmas. After the drop off I bumped into Emi in the courtyard. I was so happy to see her. All the way upstairs to our classroom we were talking about the presents we have got during Christmas. Penelope and Clemence were telling jokes and giggling. We all hang our damp, soaking wet coats on our pegs and got into the classroom. Miss Vera asked Angie and Ruben to prepare the whiteboards for the class, and Leo was late – AGAIN!!! The class went to fill their colourful water bottles. When everyone set down in their chairs Miss Viera turn on call music.
A great start Chloe H, well done for adding in lots of detail about what was happening in the classroom. Check some of your words are in the correct tense… example: we were talking about the presents we had got during Christmas.
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It was Monday Morning, it was pouring with rain, and it was everyone’s first day back at school since Christmas. Matthius and Samuel were arguing about whether the Ferrari la Ferrari or the Lamborghini Gallardo was better. Clemence, Angie, Penelope and Chloe were spraying their spray bottles at each other and were gossiping about who they thought the new teacher would be . ”I heard Miss Coleman say to Mrs Duffy that the new teacher is called Mrs Windergast,” whispered Chloe.
Everyone was in the dingy basement music room having lessons with Mr Rees. Unexpectedly the lights turned off, every fell onto the drums and pianos, making a racket. CRASH BANG WALLOP! The lights suddenly flickered on again and a woman with heavy layers of makeup was standing next to the drum kit. She was dressed in a short black and green dress and introduced herself by saying “Hello yr 3 I am your new teacher,Mrs Windergast the witch. Everyone was shocked and started shaking.Everyone started whispering and staring at her.
Good effort Orla, you have some fun ideas! Well done for adding in lots of description to set the scene. As you continue your writing, remember to read over and check your punctuation 🙂
It was Monday morning, it was pouring with rain, and it was everyone’s first day back at school after the Christmas holidays. I was soaked and I was also late that Mr potter was very upset with me so he said that he would open the folding doors and year 3 could have lessons with year 2.
Year 3 moaned and said that class 2 were just babies. Mr Potter was struggling with folding doors and said that he would go and get the caretaker. By that time class 3 saw the window open wide, a magic carpet appeared and class three opened their mouths wide as they saw it. Just then Mr Potter saw and joined year 3 by opening his mouth wide too. Malanie was still crying because Thomas, Pete and the twins were being rude to her
Good effort Gabriella! You’ve set the scene well. As you continue writing, make sure you read back over your work regularly and correct mistakes.
It was the Christmas holidays and everyone was back to school and the new teacher wasn’t there so Mr Potter was angry. Mr Potter got trapped in the folding doors and the window opened. Whoosh a man on a magic carpet flew in and MR POTTER SAW and said “What! you can’t be a teacher!”
To be Continued…
A good start Graceanne, well done for using inverted commas correctly! As you continue your writing, remember to add in detail, what were the children thinking?!
Chapter 1- Hope of the Wizard
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It was Monday morning , It was pouring with rain and it was the first day back at school after Christmas. I went in and I was late so I crept in and got away with it but when I looked I saw Mrs. Carly but she was supposed to be teaching year 5. Sitting right next to me was chumilo who was my friend she told me that Mrs. Carly was teaching class 3 because the new teacher was late so Mrs. Carly had to teach us instead.
Well done Chloe, I like the name of your first chapter!
As you continue writing, make sure you add in plenty of description, what was happening in the classroom? Don’t forget capital letters for names of people.
It was Thusrsday afternoon and the sky was gray. The rain was falling from the dark sky and the funders where hiting the strong floor. A girl was standing and waching the funders touching the ground and dissapiring on the floor. Eveyone was runing so there were not wet . “Mummy” said the girl “yes” said her mum “I’m scerd ” “don’t worry” said her mum at the same time she saw a really big tornado “o look a really big tornado ”said her mum the little girl started to cry.
Well done Malgosia, a good start to your writing. I like how you describe the thunder. As you continue your writing, remember to check over it and correct your spelling.
It was Monday morning, it was pouring rain and it was everyone’s first day back after Christmas. We had a new teacher coming over and he was late really late so at that time I was playing with my friends. Suddenly, the new teacher just flew in and he was on a flying carpet! It turned into a bicycle and Mr Potter said: You a magician not a teacher!
Good effort Angie. As you continue your writing, try to add more description to your story – what were you playing with your friends? What did the magic carpet look like?
Don’t forget inverted commas too 🙂
Well done Karolina, a good start to your writing. Remember you don’t need to include dear diary for this piece. Great effort with your handwriting! As you continue your writing, remember to use plenty of description. You could use some similes too.
It was Monday, It was pouring rain, and it was everyone’s first day back at school after Christmas .Also there was a new teacher coming to school. After my mom drop me off at school. I was running to hug my friend,she said, “hello”. The whole class was so tried in class because of the stairs I remember counting the steps and the amount the set of stairs, there are 101 steps! and 6 sets of stairs.Once the whole class was in the class room all of a sudden all of the teachers are dancing in there PJ’s.
Great start Jiana! 101 steps! Wow that’s a lot!
As you continue writing, try to include more direct speech ?
It was Monday morning. It was pouring with rain, and it was everyone’s first day back at school after Christmas. When I got to school I started walking to the fourth floor. I saw Emi and Penelope talking by the window, and Leo and Louis sharing some holiday prank details. When we all finally got to the classroom Miss Jones said “Dear class three, today you are going to meet a new teacher.” ”Who is it? What is this person going to teach us?” I asked without even thinking because the news sounded so excitingly. ”She will tell you that soon, and right now you can have a look through the window. I think she has just arrived.”
Great start Helena, you have used inverted commas correctly in your writing. I wonder what the new teacher will be like?!
Good start Eugenia, well done for adding in direct speech. As you continue your writing, try to add more description about characters and what was happening. ?