Hello Year 5!
We don’t know much about Pog yet but the author has used many adjectives and phrases to describe him (eg: we know he is ‘furry’).
If you haven’t already read the Prologue from Monday’s blog post, you can find the printable version here: POG Prologue_printable.
Here is your written task for today:
Use your yellow book to jot down any adjectives or phrases you will use in your writing.
Please then share your first paragraph with us here!
This is a character description where you will be asked to describe Pog’s appearance, action or behaviour using a variety of interestind words.
A good character description must:
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Use powerful verbs to show Pog’s personality, feelings and actions/behaviour
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Use adjectives and adverbs to develop your description and hook in your readers
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Write about Pog’s inner thoughts and ideas (based on the text shared on Monday)
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Challenge: include similes and metaphors to add detail and interest
Watch this video: what are metaphors and similes?
I will comment on what you have written, giving tips on how to make it better. Other children can also comment in this way!
Please continue to practise and draft your writing in your yellow Home Learning books, then edit it checking spelling, punctuation and grammar.
Today is just a practise where you only need to share the first paragraph by posting it on the blog – you will continue writing your draft at home and tomorrow a new blog will be posted for you to share your finished pieces.
Do not write everything on today’s blog otherwise there will be no point for writing it again for tomorrow’s published writing pieces!
So your complete character description can be drafted in your yellow homework book, and then be published on the class blog tomorrow.
We are so excited to read your first paragraphs.
Mrs Avdiu & Ms Robertson
Hi Mrs Avdiu and Ms Robertson, I hope that you are all doing well. This is my paragraph as a description for Pog:
Pog has small, furry ears. He has a soft voice and is willing to help someone in need.He is a quick thinker and is as gentle as a butterfly. He has sweet personality and is good at what he does.He is a loyal friend who keeps his promises. He is a true friend when it comes to someone in need and will stand up for what is right.
Thank you Elsa.
🙂 Good varied adjectives
Could you think of some different sentence starters other than ‘he’?
Hello Everyone!!!
This is a small paragraph describing Pog:
Pog is a furry creature, but he resembles both human kind and creature life. He lives all alone in the dark and no one has ever called him Pog in years. As Pog patrols the forest, he carries his very heavy Staff and Sword. Pog is a wonderful friend to all humans and creatures.
🙂 Good adjectives and adverbs
Can you include some similes and metaphors?
Good morning Mrs Avdiu. This is my first paragraph.
Pog is nice and friendly but shy to reveal who he is. He is furry all over and has a great sense of smell. He likes to patrol around where he lives, he carries a sword and staff.
Do we have to make up the rest of what we think his character description is as I can’t find that much description about him in the text?
Thanks Dylan.
You can use words from the prologue 🙂 Have a look at some of the other descriptions from other members of your class.
Good morning everyone!
Pog is a furry animal who lives in the heart of the dark forest . He has big ears and a nose that can smell from miles away. Although Pog seems like a very vicious and scary creature he is kind and thoughtful and always helps when help is needed.
Thank you Tommaso!
🙂 Good adjectives
Can you include some similes and metaphors?
Good morning everyone! Here’s a paragraph
that describes POG:
Pog is a furry creature that guards an attic.
He has long claws. I imagine he looks like a sloth. He is a lonely creature that hasn’t had anyone call out his name in years.
Pog is a wonderful friend to the young girl because he helped fined her way when she was lost in the forest. Pog is a creature that s good at smelling things from far.He can smell similar to a greyhound.
🙂 Wow! Brilliant description with lots of adjectives.
Can you include some similes and perhaps link some sentences together to make them more complex and so that there are not too many short sentences?
POG is a peculiar, furry, little creature. He has a great sense of direction and smell. He is as sneaky as a fox. This little creature is lightning fast and as patient as a primary school teacher. He is lonely and has a gentle heart, but is brave.
🙂 I like your simile comparing his patience to that of a primary school teacher!
Please could you include a metaphor?
Pog is a furry half human and half creature. He lives in one of the darkest areas of the forest and patrols it all the time. His identity remains secret but he is a really kind creature despite his appearance. He brings around his staff and sword but means no harm too anyone.
🙂 I like the use of the preposition ‘despite’ in your sentence
Could you include a metaphor?
Also check your spelling for ‘too’!
Hello Mrs Avdiu and Mr Robertson this is my short paragraph about Pog.
Pog is a furry creature with long ears and quiet a small body. He guards a small attic at night time, for that is where he lives. He also has long claws but Pog would never use them to harm anyone. I imagine he sort of looks like a little monster. He is very lonely and he has never really had a friend I think nobody even knows about him. When Pog saw the girl he knew he had to help her even though it was forbidden to show yourself to a humans because Pog really wanted to be a good friend. I think Pog is a very nice creature who always helps everybody. The way he found the house is because he has a great sense of smell.
Super description!
🙂 Lots of lovely adjectives and a variety of sentences.
Could you vary your sentence starters for tomorrow?
Hi everyone.
This is what I came up with for the English today.
Pog is a kind, furry creature who patrols the forest and has lived all alone for a very long time. He holds a weighty Sword and Staff to protect himself. If you saw Pog, you would probably become his friend as he is a very kind, helpful and understanding creature to everyone. He is a very good sniffer; if a human was in the forest, he would be able to scent them. If you ever get lost in the forest, Pog would help you find your way back. What a great creature he is!
I hope you enjoyed reading my character description about Pog.
Stay safe everyone. 🙂
Thank you Renee for your start to your character description. I look forward to reading the rest tomorrow.
🙂 Great adjectives to describe Pog.
Could you include some similes?
Hello everyone! For today’s task I came up with this paragraph. ?
Pot is a small, friendly creature. With a furry body, Pog patrolled the dark woods listening to any possible sound that he could hear. He lives in the darkest area of the forest ? so that his identity is kept hidden. Pog has a lion ? heart ?. Pog is extremely gentle and he is very understanding. He enjoys carrying his staff and sword ? but he means no intention of hurting people.
Hope you liked my paragraph ? ✏️ ✍?
HAVE A GREAT DAY!!
Great start Nika!
🙂 I like the way you describe his personality as well as his appearance.
Some of your sentences are very short- could they be joined to other sentences to make them more complex? Try that for tomorrow!
Hello everyone I hope you are all well.
Pog was like no creature I have ever seen. He is mole-like but has some human characteristics and can speak. He seems like a magical creature. His senses are very sharp: he can see in the dark and he is able to smell a human scent. Pog peeks through bushes and is constantly trying to stay hidden suggesting he is secretive or perhaps shy and nervous. His furry ears twitch.
Thank you Ayako- you have read and understood the text well!
Could you try to include some varied sentence openers for your final published character description tomorrow?
Hello everyone, hope you’re all okay! Here is my draft for Pog:
Gentle like a mouse and with a heart of gold, Pog Lumpkin, a small furry creature commits his entire day to protecting and patrolling the great big forest with its towering trees and prickly hedgerow bushes. Galloping through the forest faster than lightning ,Pog is always there when something goes amiss.
With his staff and sword handy, this hero to all stumbles upon a little meek girl, whose brown locks are dangling in front of her weeping eyes, sore from the tears flowing out of them, and courageously rescues her from all peril.
Back in the attic where he has made a home for himself , Pog tosses and turns, loosing precious sleep by the minute, his heart filled with sadness and a longing so deep for someone to say his name. Whilst his head is like a broken record disc, repeating the same question again and again : ‘Am I alone?’ Sadly the answer is always yes.
Wow, Lavinia – this is just fantastic! It’s exactly what I was looking for from a Year 5 piece of writing 🙂
🙂 Wonderful and varied sentence openers.
🙂 Use of similes and great vocabulary
Could you try to include a metaphor for tomorrow’s published piece? I can’t wait to read it!
Hello everyone! this is my paragraph I came up with:
Pog is a small creature who has hackles all over him. He displays many human features like good night vision, can speak and has different emotions. He is really fit as he can shimmy up a drainpipe and run really fast. As he petrols the forest ? at night and checks if anything is under control he is aware of not to uncover himself. He appears to be honest, kind, caring and decisive as he finds a lost girl?? in the forest and takes her to her back to her home ?
I hope you have a nice day ☘️
Maia?
Thank you Maia for using lots of adjectives to describe Pog.
Could you include some similes and metaphors for tomorrow’s published piece?
Hi everyone this is my character description about Pog.
Pog carries a sword and a staff like a knight in shining armour, but doesn’t like to hurt anyone with them. He is aware of his surroundings like a robber breaking into a house on the darkest of nights. Pog likes to patrol where he lives but doesn’t like to reveal himself. His good sense of smell meant that he can smell when humans are coming.
Thanks for making a start on your character description, I look forward to reading the rest tomorrow!
🙂 good adjectives and a good attempt to apply a simile to your writing. Do you think Pog should be compared to a robber?
Could you try to vary your sentence starters for tomorrow?
Hi everyone I hope you are having a nice day.
Pog is a furry mysterious creature who lurks in the heart of the gloomy forest where the sun is shrouded by trees. He moves stealthily through the forest and is prohibited from revealing himself to the human world but is willing to make brazen decisions to help others.This unknown creature is extremely loyal and he sticks to his job even though he is as lonely as a self – icolating Polar Bear.
A self-isolating polar bear! Ha! Brilliant!
Thank you Theo. Great use of adjectives, adverbs and similes.
Could you include some metaphors in tomorrow’s published piece?
Hello Mrs Avdiu,
Here is my description od POG:
At night, Pog patrolls in the attic all alone. In the dark, his eyesight is piercing whilst his sense of smell is better than any human’s. Pog walks on two legs and knows how to fight with with his sword. Always willing to do the right thing, Pog is a loyal creature ready to help anyone. Despite his frightening appearance, Pog is reassuring and uses friendly tones and words. Pog is as furry as a mammoth which is why his hackles stand on end when he is scared. Pog knows the forest like the back of his hand, knowing every tree and path. Kind-hearted as he is, Pog is sure to understand one’s situations and feelings as if there were his.
Thank you Jeanne.
🙂 varied sentence starters, I really like them!
Could you try to include more metaphors in tomorrow’s published piece?
Well done!
Hello! This is the paragraph i came up with to describe Pog.
Pog, a small furry creature that dedicates his whole day to guarding the forest. Pog has manny features of a human: emotions, good night vision and he can speak.He has a brilliant sense of smell, so that he can know when humans are coming. Pog carries a staff and sword to defend himself if needed, however, Pog doesn’t hurt anyone with them. One day while Pog was patrolling, he found a girl sobbing in the forest, so it apears that Pog kind and honest.
Thats all i have. Have a Nice rest of the Day!
Thanks Ava! This is a good summary of who we know Pog to be from the prologue. Please read Lavinia’s comment on this blog to get an idea of what we expect from a ‘character description’ piece of writing for tomorrow 🙂
Thank you for your efforts
Good Evening everyone! I hope you’re all well, here’s my paragraph about Pog;
Pog is a furry creature with sympathy towards innocent beings and so acts in protection for them. He has adequate curiosity as well as a loveable personality. His emotions are quite like human seeing as he’s just about able to talk. Pog enjoys patrolling the forest however hides in the shadows evading exposure. As much as he admires company, Pog is incredibly lonesome and craves for the feeling of friends… I hope you all enjoy the rest of your day! Good bye!
Hi Maya! Thank you for sharing your description of Pog.
🙂 Lots of wonderful vocabulary and great punctuation
Could you try to include some similes and metaphors in tomorrow’s published piece? Have a lovely evening!
Hello everyone , Miss Avdiu , Miss Robertson ,
I hope you are all OK 🙂
Pog is a mystery and fury creature willing to help anyone in need.
He is a very kind and understanding creature that lives in the dark woods. He can smell better than any human. He is a lonely and brave beast with a gentle heart.
Thank you Violette.
(Sp) mysterious, furry
? I like the last sentence in particular – it really summarised who Pog is.
Could you vary your sentence starters for the final published piece?
Hi Mrs Avdiu here is the first paragraph of my character description of POG.
With his staff and sword, POG is a brave fellow who you would think has many friends, but he has none. Once a long time ago, POG had one friend, a girl, but she left. Now he patrols the forest floor around an old desolate house that the girl once lived in with his eyes like lamps keeping to a long-kept promise.
🙂 Great vocabulary and some good sentences starters!
Could you try to include some more metaphors and similes for your final published piece?
Thank you Violette.
(Sp) mysterious, furry
🙂 I like the last sentence in particular – it really summarised who Pog is.
Could you vary your sentence starters for the final published piece?
Pogg Lumpkin is a curious soul who is alone and lonely. His orange ears twitch sharply while his smile shimmers and sparkles as he patrols the forest at the dead of the night. As orange as a pumpkin, his lonely yet kind-hearted soul, got curious as the sound came closer.
Wow! What a fantastic starting paragraph. I love the phrase ‘curious soul’. Well done 🙂 I am impressed.
Could you try to include a metaphor?